Andreas indra bagus setiawan
(1420302178)
5/E
Pet dogs vs. Pet cats
Dogs
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Strong
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Fast
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Clever
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Like to play
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Bark
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Loyal to the
employers
Similarities
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Have four legs
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Have fur
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Type of animal
Cats
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Not to fast
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Lazzy
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Like to sleep
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Meow
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Weak body
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Chase mice
These day we know that a lot of people have a pet in
their house, like dog and cat. They have many reason raise this animal. Some of
people have a dog for protect him from a big trouble like robbing,crime and
attack another animal. Not a litle bit people have a cat they raise cat for
playing and lazzying together cat like playing a wool, litle ball and dont like
to swim or take bath. They also lazzy animal and not to strong animal.
To begin with the similarities dog and cat also have a
fur, four legs and they are type of animal. Dog have a pure fur also cat, both
of them like playing with their employer. Not only dog but also cat like to eat
or to bit something. Both of them can protect their employers when he is in
dangerous situation. Neither dog nor cat are infallible when they protect their
employers. But both of them will do the best as much as they can.
Now i’ll tell about the differences between dog and cat. Many people in this country
raise the dog because they think dog is more stong than cat , more fast than
cat, more clever and another else. Most of them prefer to raise dogs than cat
because many reason like on the top. Dog can run so fast when he feel his
employers in dangerous he’ll try to help them as best as he can. But not with
the cat, cat very like to sleep, lazzying,spending time with stretch out. Dog
hav a special skill when stranger people come around in his area they’ll bark
so loud to warn their employers.
Another differences between dogs and
cats. All people who love this animal know it , dog’s body more big than cats.
And more strong than cat,more fit than cat. All people who have dog is know dog
is more loyal to the employer than cat. Both of them are cute when baby, and
dog more dashing than cat when they adult.
And the conclusion from this comparison
is dog and cat have a similirities and differences . Although both of the type
of animal,they still have differences between them. And people chose to raise
dog or cat for their importance. Like to save their house, their live or become
their guard. Also cat for playing with their childern and for become friend when
they sleep.
Dwi Arif Wibowo 1420302158
ReplyDeleteHi Mr. Indra, This is my comment for your essay.
1. "Lazzy" should be changed to "lazy"
2. hmmm "These day " should be changed to "nowadays"
3. "litle bit people" should be changed to " little bit people"
4. "people have a cat they raise cat for playing and lazzying" should be changed to " people have a cat they raise cats for playing and lazing"
5. " litle ball and dont like to" should be changed to " little ball and don't like "
6. "Not only dog but" should be changed to "Not only dog, but"
7. "to bit something" should be changed to "to bite something"
8. " i’ll" should be changed to " I’ll"
9. Be careful with the term "lazy". You should write "lazy" not "lazzy"
10. be careful with full stop and coma. You don't need 'space' before it.
11. "they think dog is more stong than cat , more fast than cat," should be changed to "they think the dog is stronger than a cat, faster than a cat,"
12. "many reason like on the top" "many reasons like on the top"
13. "dog and cat have a similirities and differences." "dog and cat have some similarities and differences."
I’m not perfect. Correct me if I’m wrong.
your essay good :) but to be much better if you use column to compare and similary your data.
ReplyDeleteand attention your paragraph,if you orgenaize your paragraph it is better :) thank you :) sorry :)
Hello Andreas :) i will give you the feedback about your essay. the title is interesting, but there are some grammatical mistakes that i want to correct, here they are:
ReplyDelete1. On the first paragraph, the words "These day" supposed to be "These days".
2. "have many reason" should be "have many reasons". yo have to be paid attention about singular and plural forms.
3. On third paragraph, the words " is more stong", i think you have made some typo. it should be "stronger" :)
4. On fourth paragraph, the word "cats" supposed to be "cat's", because the statement defined about possessive case.
that's all Andreas.
good writing!
thank your for all your comment and i hope i can be better in the next :)
ReplyDeleteMusyarofah Noviyani (1420302159)
ReplyDeleteHi Andreas. i have some comments about your essay.
1. "They have many reason" should be "They have many reasons"
2. "Some of people have a dog for protect him" should be "Some of people have a dog for protect them"
3. "attack another animal" should be "attacked by another animal"
4. "with their employer" sould be "with their owner"
5. "when he" should be "when they"
6. "stong" should be "stronger than"
7. "many reason" should be "many reasons"
you should check you grammar and dictions. :)
Hi Andreas! After reading your essay, I will make some corrections for your essay. Here are my corrections :
ReplyDelete1. On the first paragraph, "these day" should be "these days". Then, I think it's better for you to write "these animals" not "this animal" because before you mentioned two animals, dog and cat.
2. On paragraph 2, it supposed to be "they are types of animals"
3. What do you mean by "their employer"? It should be "their owner"
4. On paragraph 3, the words " prefer to raise dogs than cat " will be better if you write " prefer raising dogs to raising cats".
5. "Dog can run so fast when he feel..." I think it's better to replace the word "he" with "it" because it's dog.
6. On paragraph 4. "dog’s body more big than cats" should be "dog's body is bigger than cat's"
7. You have to pay attention when writing the words "and" and "but". It shouldn't be at the beginning of sentence.
Thank you, hope your essay will be better next time ^^
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ReplyDeleteDian kusumawati (1420302192)
ReplyDeleteHello andreas indra
Your essay is good, but there are some mistake.
1. "When he ia in dangerous situation" should be changed to "when they are"
2. "More fast" should be changed to "faster"
3. "More clever" should be changed to "cleverer"
4. "More big and more strong" should be changed to "bigger and stronger"
5. "Hav" should be changed to "have"
6. "All people who have dog is know dog is more... ". What is meant by this sentence? Maybe you should changed to "all people who have dog know that dog is... "
7. "They adult" should be changed to "they are adult"
Thank you. Cmiiw