The Causes of Poverty in Indonesia
Indonesia is one of the
big countries in Southeast Asia which has high population of citizens (Sugiharyanto, 2006:70). That big population
of citizens in Indonesia make the government harder for giving attention to his
citizens. Whereas, the poverty of Indonesian citizen are spread in very great
quantities in most of districts in Indonesia. That case make Indonesia get 15th
rank of the poorest country in Asia (Poorest
Countries in Asia by GDP rank, 2015). Indonesian’s poor citizens usually
live in the small islands of Indonesia which rarely reached by government and
technology. Some of them also live near the central government, but they still
can not get their prosperity. The case of poverty in Indonesia is motivated by
several reasons, either internal reasons (inside Indonesia) or external reasons
(global effect).
There are many reasons
that cause poverty in Indonesia, the first one is termination of employment.
The causes from termination of employment is because of many crises in
Indonesia that make some companies decide to reduce some of its employee. The
crises are consist of several kinds, they are moneter crisis, knowledge crisis,
and political crisis. A moneter crisis is one of the external reason which
happens because of instability of the global economy, while a knowledge crisis
occurs because of incompetence labor are replaced by competence labor. The last
is political crisis which occurs because of the game that played by executive
circle in the company. They sacked their employees and replace them with their
families or their relations.
The other causes behind
the poverty case in Indonesia is about government’s policy which is one of the
internal reason. Some of government’s regulation are not giving advantages for
the citizens. One example of the rules that make the citizen are getting miserable
is an increasing of BBM price. The price of foods, clothes, and transportations
are definetely increase and hard to decrease.
The last big problem that
make the number of poverty are getting increase is the high rates of
corruption. Indonesia even placed at the most corrupt country in Asia Pacific (Political & Economic Risk Consultancy, 2008-2010). Many cases of corruption
are mostly happened inside executive circles in Indonesia. They took citizen’s
money for their individual needs without thought about citizen’s prosperity.
The high rates of poverty
in a country always cause many negative impacts for the country itself. Several
things that will be happened as impacts of the poverty are high dropout rates,
criminal cases, and declining health of citizens. The Government should begin
to take a step for decreasing so many poverty case in Indonesia.
Shortly, Indonesia is one of the big
countries in Southeast Asia which has a high population of citizens (Sugiharyanto,
2006:70). Most of the citizens are on the stage of poverty. There are three
cases that causes the high poverty rate
in Indonesia, they are: termination of employment, government’s policy, and the
high rates of corruption. The impacts from the high poverty rates in Indonesia
are high dropout rates, criminal case, and declining health of citizens.
Cause and Effect Essay Made By : Hana Suci Anggraeni (1420302175/E)
Dwi arif wibowo
ReplyDeleteHi Hana… this is my comment for your essay
1. "That case make" should be changed to "That case makes"
2. "they still can not get" should be changed to "they still cannot get"
3. "The crises are consist" should be changed to "The crises consist"
4. "they are moneter crisis"should be changed to "they are monetary crisis"
5. "A moneter crisis is one of the external reason" should be changed to "A monetary crisis is one of the external reasons"
6. "one of the internal reason" should be changed to "one of the internal reasons"
7. "Some of government’s regulation" should be changed to "Some of government’s regulations"
8. "transportations are definetely increase" should be changed to"transportations are definitely increase"
9. "The last big problem that make" should be changed to "The last big problem that makes"
10. "Several things that will be happened as impacts" should be changed to "Several things that will happen as the impacts"
I’m not perfect. Correct me if I’m wrong
okay thank's bowo 😁
Deleteandreas indra (1420302178)
ReplyDeletehi hana
you mention some cause who make poverty in indonesia and i agrre with your statement. althought you made several mistake which has been mentioned by mr bowo i just wanna tell you never give up ! and try to do the best
Hello Hana! :) Your writing has been good enough, but I found a little bit mistakes. Here are my corrections for your essay :
ReplyDelete1. On paragrpah 1, the word "make" in "That big population of citizens in Indonesia make" should be "makes".
2. On paragraph 2, "The causes" should be "the cause" because you did not mention more than one cause.
3. On paragraph 3, it should be "one of the external reasons"
4. Still on paragraph 3, "citizen are getting" should be "citizens are getting"
5. On paragraph 4, "price of foods, clothes, and transportations" should be "price of foods, clothes and transportations"
That's all, Hana. Thank you ^__^
Dian kusumawati
ReplyDeleteHello hana,
Your writing is very good and interesting.
Good job hana,
I just want give you a comment, "one of the internal reason" should be changed to "one of the internal reasons"
Thank you
Keep spirit