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Comparison and Contrast_DANITA L GHAISANI_

Name    : Danita Laila Ghaisani (1110302098)

Comparisons Between Education in Indonesia and Abroad

               The level of education of each country is different. It is influenced from the level of a country's economic progress. Developing countries such as Indonesia quality is far different from the developed countries in Europe. Even in Asia the quality of education our country is still disappointing. Many Indonesian students studying in neighboring countries. That's because they consider the schools in the neighboring country a better quality of education. They are more interested to study in another country.

               Differences education in Indonesia and abroad such as, first, how to teach that valuable time for teachers to enhance students' knowledge. If in Indonesia, time spent in learning can not be maximized properly. In contrast to education abroad, a very special time in learning to provide the knowledge. Students are required to understand, memorize and understand. Second, learning system in Indonesia, we have a complete learning materials but we have a way of teaching that is still mediocre. It makes the openness of their thinking is still low and difficult to develop. In contrast to overseas, teachers have an obligation to create them and the students' ability for students can know and understand the material being taught .

               Third, at least the knowledge of the students. Students only get knowledge from the teacher. Students do not have the awareness or interest to find out a broader knowledge. In contrast to abroad, students must actively participate in the learning inside or outside the classroom. Students already have a high awareness of the importance of education and mastery of science and technology. In terms of educational technology, Indonesia is a country that is still lagging behind technological advances. In contrast to the developed countries that have a fairly sophisticated technology.

               The responsibility of a teacher and the role of teachers to students. From inside or outside the school. Responsible teacher in the school, while parents are responsible outside the school. If the student outside of school is already not the responsibility of the teacher. In school we already know well the role of teachers in teaching but may differ in the community. In contrast to abroad, student life inside or outside a school teacher who is responsible and not the parents .

               So, therefore, the role of educators is very important for the development of students. Improving the quality of teachers is a major problem that must be addressed by the Indonesian state. Education and training become professional teachers to be very important for our country. And also most of the problems of education in Indonesia are caused by factors economy. It is seen many students do not continue their education. Moreover, the lack of funds also led to the lack of availability of infrastructure and adequate technology.

 

 

 

 

 

       

 

8 comments:

  1. Hana Suci Anggraeni (1420302175/E)
    Hello Mrs. Danita :) before i start for giving you my feed back,let me say sorry first, because there are some critics that i will give to your article. i think your article is good, because you are creative enough in choosing the topic but, there are some grammatical mistakes in your article.
    1. on paragraph 1 sentence 2, you'd better to write "it's influenced by the level....."
    2. on paragraph 1 sentence 3, word developing and developed should be "develop".
    3. on paragraph 1 sentence 4, after word "Even" give coma punctuation (,). then, the statement can be replaced by "education quality in our country...."
    4.on paragraph 1 sentence 5, the word studying is supposed to be "study" and neighboring become "neighbor countries".
    5. on paragraph 1 sentence 6, the statement "they consider the schools in the neighboring country a better quality of education" may be would be nice if it is replaced with "they consider for choosing the schools in neighbor countries which have better education quality".
    6. On paragraph 2 sentence 2, word "spent" supposed to be "spends".
    7. On paragraph 2 sentence 5, the statement "we have a complete learning materials but we have a way of teaching that is still mediocre" supposed to be "we have a complete learning material, but the way for teaching is still mediocre".
    8. On paragraph 2 sentence 6, the statement "their thinking is" should be "their thought are".
    9. On paragraph 3, the third aspect is better to be written into paragraph 2. so, the paragraph 2 contain 3 aspects from 1st, 2nd, and 3rd aspects. each aspect will not be separated.
    10. On paragraph 4 sentence 3, the statement "Responsible teacher in the school" should be "Teacher's responsibility is inside the school".
    11. On paragraph 4 sentence 4, i guess the meaning of the sentence is hard to be understood, hehehe :)
    12. from a whole of paragraph 4, i think the correlation between sentence to sentence are not too well.
    13. On paragraph 5 sentence 3, "to be" supposed to be replaced with "will be".
    14. On paragraph 5 sentence 4, the conjunction "and" is not appropriate if written on the beginning of the sentence.

    that's all Mrs. awesome writing ^-^

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  2. Hello friend I have some suggestion for your article
    1. In 1 paragraph you should use are after each county not is. In this paragraph you should explain what the point will compare.
    2. In 2 paragraph you write "time spent" it should "spent time"
    3. In the last paragraph you should explain conclusion by contrast sentences.
    Thank You

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  3. Musyarofah Noviyani (1420302159)

    Hi Ms. Danita. i have some comment about your essay.
    1. "Developing countries such as Indonesia quality is far different from the developed countries in Europe." do you mean "the quality of deleping countries such as Indonesia is far from the developing countries in Europe' ?
    2. "Even in Asia" you have give comma (,) after "Asia"
    3. i thnk "Many Indonesian students studying in neighboring countries. That's because they consider the schools in the neighboring country a better quality of education." should be "Many Indonesian students studying in neighboring countries, because they consider that the schools in the neighboring countries have a better quality of education."
    4. "Differences education in Indonesia and abroad" sould be "The differences education in Indonesia and abroad"
    5. "It makes the openness of their thinking" should be "It makes their mindset"

    i think, you have to check you grammar, puntuation and dictions.
    CMIIW :) :)

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  4. In the sentence "The responsibility of a teacher and the role of teachers to students. From inside or outside the school.".maybe will specific if a sign of the connections sentence using coma not the point.

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  5. Antika Esty S (1420302161/E)
    Hallo Mrs. Danita, i want to give some comments for ypu essay
    1. Sentence "Many Indonesian students studying" is wrong, it should be " are studying" because it is present continous
    2. Sentence "Students are.." is better if you wrote "The students..."
    3. "Their thinking is still.." is wrong, it shoul be "their thinking are still..."
    4. "Improving the quality of teachers is..." is wrong, it should be "the quality of teachers are..."
    5. "And also.." in rule of write in the beginning sentence does not use conjunction.
    Thank you :)

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  6. Hello Danita!!!
    I’m sorry but any words that you must change because that’s wrong words, such as :
    In the second paragraph Differences education in Indonesia and abroad such as may be you can use The Differences education in Indonesia and abroad such as,
    And the third paragraph, Third, at least the knowledge of the students may be you can use The third, at least the knowledge of the students. Have you can change it to be has.
    The fourth paragraph Responsible teacher in the school, while parents are responsible outside the school may be you can erase (,) so the sentence can be Responsible teacher in the school while parents are responsible outside the school.
    Thank you Danita… 

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  7. Dian kusumawati (1420302192)
    Hello mbak wanita,
    Your writing is good and interesting.
    I just found a mistake. "Many indonesian students studying " should be changed to "many indonesian students study" or "many indonesian students are studying"
    Thanks. Cmiiw
    Keep spirit

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  8. Shafira Adhelia (1420302179)

    Hello Mrs. Danita! After reading your essay, I found some mistakes in it. Here are my corrections for your mistakes :
    1. On paragraph 1, "Developing countries" should be "develop countries"
    2. "Even in Asia the quality of education our country is still disappointing" should be "Even in Asia, the education quality of our country is still disappointing"
    3. "the schools in the neighboring country a better quality of education" should be "the schools in neighbour countries have better education quality"
    4. On paragraph 2, "Differences education in Indonesia and abroad " should be "The differences between education in Indonesia and abroad "
    5. "education abroad" should be "education in abroad"
    6. "Responsible teacher" should be "teacher's responsibility"
    7. The words such as "and" & "but" shouldn't be at the beginning of sentences. You have to remind it.
    8. Please maintain your grammar, so your next essay will be better ^^

    That's all. Thank you ^__^

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