Name : Yulinda P
SN : 1420302176
Cat and Lion
Animal
is one kind of creatures that living in this world. There are many different
species of animals that can be distinguished by their physical characteristics
or benefits. Others, there are many animals which can be distinguishend by the
useful or the benefits.There are two types of animals, pets or tame animal, and
wild animal. Pets, is an animal commonly maintained by humans, whether it is
serves as lovely pets, or it could hire someone’s hobby as an animal lover, for
example cat. Wild animal is an animal which has wild characteristic, for
example lion. The wild animal is prohibited to be a pets because it will give
the dangerous effect.
As
we know, the silmiliarities of cat and lion are in many aspect. They are
belonging to carnivore. In the physical body, it has four legs. It has fur in
their body, and the breeding way of is give birth. The kind of the food are
similiar,it is kind of meat. They breathe using the lungs. The way they move to
other place by running.
Cat is
an animal which lives in land. It is kind of pet. Cat is not have a big
strength like a lion. The body is smaller than lion, and it can’t as big as
lion.Cat is a suitable pet to maintained, because it is not wild. The reason to
maintain cat as their pets because they has a funny face. It also can be a pets
which accustomed to do something that we want.
Lion
is an animal which lives in the forest. It is kind of wild animal. It has a
great body, and strong canine. It is also has sharp smelling. Lion called as
the king of the forest because the strengthness. The sound of Lion is tottaly different with cat. If the cat
is mew , the lion is roar, it is totally different.
Cat
and lion is different yet alike. Although they have the difference in some
part, but they are still in the same type of animal based on the type of food
(carnivore). The difference and the similiarities of those animals are very
closed. Both of them has their own strength and weakness. They have own way to
shown it self. Every animal has their own characterictics to distinguish each
other. That is the purpose of the God in create the creatures.
Hana Suci Anggraeni (1420302175/E)
ReplyDeleteHi, Yulinda.. your writing looks like great. i like your choosen title, but there are some grammatical mistakes in your article (based on my own perspective.
1) On paragraph 1 sentence 4, the statement "There are two types of animals, pets or tame animal, and wild animal" should be "There are two types of animals, they are pet or tame animal and wild animal", be careful in giving the punctuation, ok? :D
2) On paragraph 2, sentence 1, the word "aspect" is supposed to be "aspects".
3) On paragraph 2 sentence 2, the statement "They are belonging to carnivore" should be "They belong to carnivore".
4) On paragraph 2 sentence 4, the word "similiar" supposed to be "similar".
5) On paragraph 3 sentence 4, "to maintained" should be "to maintain".
6) On paragraph 5 sentence 2, after word "Although" better to give coma (,).
7) On paragraph 5 sentence 3, the word "difference" supposed to be "differences" and the word "closed" supposed to be "close".
8) On paragraph 5 sentence 5, the statement "They have own way" supposed to be "they have their own way".
9) On paragraph 5 sentece 7, the word "in create" supposed to be "in creating".
That's all. keep up your good writing! ^^
Ok thanks for your comment Hana :)
ReplyDeleteHi yulinda, your essay looks good, but i'd like to give you my comments about your essay. here they are:
ReplyDelete1. "Animal is one kind " it will be better to add the in front of animal "The animal is one kind "
2. "can be distinguishend" it should be "can be distinguished"
3. "to be a pets" it should be "to be a pet"
4. "the silmiliarities " it should be "the similarities "
5. "in many aspect" it should be "in many aspects"
CMIIW :v
Antika Esty S(1420302161/E)
ReplyDeleteHi Yulinda, i'd like to comment for your essay
1. Sentence "pets, is sn animal..." should be "are"
2. "They are belonging to " is wrong, should be "belong to"
3. "The way they , it is better if you write "the way, they..
4. "Cat and lion is.." itis wrong, should be "are"
Thank you :)
Hello Yulinda!!!
ReplyDeleteI’m sorry but any words that you must change because that’s wrong words, such as :
In the first paragraph, “the benefits.There” you forgot to gave space there. It must be “the benefits. There”
In the second paragraph, silmiliarities it should be similarities,”… similiar,it…” it should be “…similar, it…”
And the third paragraph, as lion.Cat is you forgot to gave space there.
The fourth paragraph, can be a pets which accustomed I think it should be can be a pet which accustomed,
Thank you Yulinda…
Shafira Adhelia (1420302179)
ReplyDeleteHi Yulinda! I found some mistakes in your essay. Here are my corrections for your mistakes :
1. On paragraph 1, " that living in this world" should be " that lives in this world"
2. "it is serves" should be "it is served"
3. "a pets" should be "a pet"
4. On paragraph 2, "It has fur in their body, and the breeding way of is give birth" should be "It has fur in their body and the breeding way of is give birth"
5. On paragraph 3. "Cat is not have" should be "Cat doesn't have"
6. "to maintained" should be "to be maintained"
7. On paragraph 4, " mew " should be "meow"
8. On the last paragraph, "Cat and lion is different" should be "Cat and lion are different"
9. "some part" should be "some parts"
That's all, Yulinda. Thank you ^^
1. 'Animal is one..' maybe 'The animal is one..'
ReplyDelete2. 'For excample lion/cat' maybe 'for excample is..'
3. 'The difference' maybe 'the differences'
3.