Malya Anisa Purnamadini
1420302180
5/E
The
Comparison Between Camera Hp and Camera DSLR
Technological developments always demanded to something
that practicial. Like example technological development on the camera, as a
feature of the technology that seem to have become the staple.
We
always use a handphone (HP) everyday or everytime. If you initially only serves
as a means of communication voice and messages. Now, HP is equipped with a
digicam. Even the ability and the quality of a HP in the recording an object,
already almost equivalent with a digicam in general. With the magnitude of the
resolution of the camera, it’s difficult to distinguish between the photos HP
with a photos of digicam.
In
fact, everybody from the children until the adult have a handphone and they use
it to communicate with another people, to exis in social media like Instagram,
BBM, Facebook, ect. Almost everybody use the handphone to take a picture
(selfie) and then they upload it in their social media. Be sides use a camera
HP, they can also use a camera DSLR (if they have), but cannot used to selfie. A
camera DSLR can give result highly satisfactory from the quality of the image
that resulted. A camera DSLR is a type of the camera options for the
photographer professional or ordinary people.
Some users a camera DSLR also very fond of ease in
editing the results of a picture of using featured in a camera, so they can
save our time because we could editing pictures without having to use computer.
As well as camera HP also many feature in it to editing the pictures. From the
size of the sensor DSLR have sensor greater than camera HP. So, because the
size of the sensor camera HP smaller it will affect the size of the print. On
the camera DSLR we can scored more than 16R (30x40), while with the camera HP
we can only photographing around only 6R. A camera DSLR more flexible to the
excange of various types of the lens. It cannot used on a camera HP. A camera
HP lighter and more easily to operating the knobs than camera DSLR.
We can bring a camera HP whenever-wherever without feel
heavy, because DSLR heavier and bigger so that can’t be incorporated into the
pockets. If we want to go to some places, we don’t need to be confused about forgot to bring a digicam. You can
capture the moment at the time with camera HP. A camera DSLR is usually used to
show that are official. Not only the differences between camera HP with DSLR, but they have
someness. In common that they are equally could use autofocus in both of the
camera. After take a photo, we can editing in each of the camera because both
of the camera have a certain knobs that can be used. Now, many people who have
two camera HP and DSLR. Not only used in the moment in particular, but now they
prefer to use it because they want to exist in the neighborhood them.
Although the quality of their different but both each
needed, each profitable and have many benefits by a lot of people. Didn’t lose
if we could have both. The size of the camera HP now also more no less with
DSLR.
hi malya, i have some opinions for your essay:
ReplyDelete1. you often say camera hp, but it will be correct if you use 'hp camera'
2. hp is one of digital brand, so you should spell it in specific one. so i think that it will be better if you use the word 'handphone'.
3. pay more attention for grammar rule.
4. thank you
Hana Suci Anggraeni (1420302175/E)
ReplyDeleteHello Malya. On this occasion i'd like to give some comments to your essay. here they are:
1. On the second paragraph, " everyday or everytime" supposed to be "everyday and everytime", because the word everyday and everytime have different meaning. so, the conjuction "or" is not appropriate to be used. be careful for putting conjunction into sentence OK? ^^
2. you have to pay attention for giving the punctuation, especially coma(,).
3. on third paragraph the words "Be sides use a camera HP", supposed to be "beside".
4. on the forth paragraph, "we could editing" should be "we could edit. because, after modal you have to put V1.
5. on the fifth paragraph, the statement "A camera DSLR is usually used to" supposed to be like this "A camera DSLR is usually uses to", because the form from that statement is present, so the word "used" should be "uses".
6. On the last paragraph, after word "Although" you should put coma (,) after that.
That's all Malya.
Maintain your writing works.
Thank you ^^
andreas indra (1420302178)
ReplyDeleteheloo malya
i wanna give you some advice your comparison is good but i agree with hana comment . she is very conscientious so she can give you more advice . i hope you can be better in the future.
Musyarofah Noviyani (1420302159)
ReplyDeleteHi Malya. I have somment about your essay.
1. "Like example" i think it'll baetter "For example"
2. "In fact, everybody from the children until the adult have a handphone and they use it to communicate with another people, to exis in social media like Instagram, BBM, Facebook, ect." you have give the dot (.) after "another people"
3. "Be sides" should be "Beside"
4. "Some users a camera DSLR" should be "Some users of camera DSLR"
5. ". So," i think "so" isn't allowed on the baginning of the sentence.
I thik, your essay is good. it'll better if you check your puntuation and your dictions. I think, "HP" should change be "Smartphone" , because not every HP has camera. :) :)
CMIIW
Hello Malya! I'd like to make corrections for your essay. Here they are :
ReplyDelete1. On the first paragraph, "Like example" should be "for example". Still on paragraph 1, "that seem" should be "that seems".
2. On the third paragraph, "Be sides " should be "besides".
3. On the fourth paragraph, " Some users a camera DSLR" should be "some users of a DSLR camera". Still on the same paragraph, " It cannot used on a camera HP" should be " It cannot be used on a handphone camera"
4. On the fifth paragraph, "without feel heavy" should be "without feeling heavy".
5. You have to put "is" after you write DSLR in words " DSLR heavier and bigger ", so it becomes " DSLR is heavier and bigger "
That's all Malya. You have to check your dictions when writing your essay and pay attention to your grammar,
Thank you ^__^
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ReplyDeleteDian kusumawati (1420302192)
ReplyDeleteHello malya,
I have some comments for you
1. "Be sides" should be changed to "beside"
2. "We can only photographing" should be changed to "we can only photograph"
3. "Whenever, wherever" should be added "and"
4. "Someness" i think better you use the word "similarities"
5. "We can editing" should be changed to "we can edit"
Malya, can must be followed by V1
thanks
Keep spirit!!