Name : TEZA PUTRA HANDIKA
NM : 1420302168
Class : 5
The Phenomenon of Indonesian Transport
Transport or
transportation is the movement of people, animals, and goods from one location
to other. In Indonesia, many people use transportation for their daily
activity. Public transportation is a shared passenger transport service which
is available for use by the general public. In Indonesia has 3 kinds of
transportations, there are land transportation, water transportation and air
transportation. The transportations in Indonesia are always evolved to be better.
But according the passenger, there are a lot of things that should be
justified. For example are delays in the schedule, the service less satisfying,
and the condition of transportations still bad.
The delays in the schedule
is caused by several things. For example is stuck in the street. This is led
the passenger must waiting for several time without the certainly. So, its can
make them confuse and disturbed.
The service less
satisfying. Many People will agree with this statement. Services tend to be less friendly and impressed resent
something. This is made the passengers was reluctant to use the transportation.
The passengers still feel
that the condition of transportations still bad till now. The hopefulness for
travel with comfortable, safe and pleasing transportation are still be a dream.
So the pasengers must accept the reality that the condition of transportation
still make discomfort at the traveling.
The conclution is the
condition of Indonesian transportation is still make the passenger
uncomfortable. From the schedule, the unit of the transportation, and the
services that can make them not satisfied and reluctant to use the
transportation again.
Nice 😂
ReplyDeleteIn line 4, i guess it will be better if word "in" was eliminated.
ReplyDeleteIn line 11, i guess it will be better if word "disturbed" replaced by "disturb"
Thank you 😀
Thank you guys for your attention. It was very helpful to me in knowing my mistake in writing.
ReplyDeleteFor Fatih thank you so much... :)
my comments are :
ReplyDelete1. "The delays in the schedule is caused" must be "The delays in the schedule are caused"
2. "So, its can make them" must be "So, it can make them"
3. "The conclution is the condition" must be "The conclusion is the condition"
CMIIW :v
Hana Suci Anggraeni (1420302175/E)
ReplyDeleteHi Teza..Your essay looks great, but there are some comments that i want to tell to you..here they are:
1. on the first paragraph, "for use" supposed to be "for using" because if you use "for" the word after it should be written into V ing. then, after the word "but", you'd better to give comma (,) after it.
2. on the second paragraph "is caused" supposed to be "are caused", because the word "delays" have shown us about plurality.
3. on the third paragraph, you'd better to erase the word "many" beside the word "people", cause "people" here has shown us about plurality. please pay attention about singular or plural form, OK?
4. on the last paragraph, the word "conclution" should be "conclusion".
well, that's all Teza.
Antika Esty S. (1420302161/E)
ReplyDeleteHi teza, i'd like to comment for your essay
1. Sentence "so, its can make" should be "it can makes".
2. The passenger still" should be "is still".
3. The last paragraph your word "conclution" is wrong, should be"conclusion"
Thank you :)
1. Not 'For use',but for using
ReplyDelete2. You should 'but'not put behind the poin. As in the sentence ..better. But according..