Online Shop VS Offline Shop
Most
of people want to get everything in simple way. In this modern era, everything is
easier. We can use our gadget to access everything what we need, because every gadget connect with
internet, just for clicking them. Especially shopping, if we want cloth, bag,
or something to wear, we can click shop link then they will send the stuff. In
my opinion, there are some differences between online shop and offline shop;
location, stuff, and pay.
First,
the location. If we are busy, there is traffic jam or rainy day but we need
something we can get it in simple way. We can search everyting what we want and
what we need on online shop. If we want shoes, we just click buy. In Mall or
Boutique, it’ll be little hard if there is traffic jam. We can spend our time
in way go to there, because the location
is far from us. Then, if we arrive to the Mall or Boutique maybe the stuff
that we want is sold out. Mall or Boutique are waste the time.
Second,
about the stuff. If we are talking about shopping, it related with choosing
some stuffs. Like if we shop at the Mall or Boutique. Online shop has various
stuffs that we don’t know they are original or not, match or not. If we are
going to Mall or Boutique, but maybe the stuff isn’t more various like in
online shop. There is plus point if we shop in Mall or Boutique, it’ll be easy
to compare the dress with our body. We know that the stuff is original or not.
Then, we can get the match one.
Third,
is about paying. Like in paragraph 2, if we are busy or there is traffic jam,
but we need something we can get it in simple way. We can use online shop. Same
like if we shop in Mall or Boutique, we can see many various stuff and various price. On online shop, we click
the stuff what we want. Looking the stuff that maybe they are not in Mall or
Boutique. Then, we just pay it via bank or m-banking. The stuff will arrive to our
house safely. In Mall or Boutique, we choose the stuff, then pay it in the
cashier.
There
are some differences between online shop and offline shop. There are location,
stuff, and pay. If we have no time to go
to the Mall or Boutique, we can use our gadget to find what we want. Then pay
it via m-banking. Our stuff will arrive safely to our home, but the stuff can
wrong. Like not original or not fit with our body or somethong else. If we buy
in Mall or Boutique, we can choose the stuffs. It match with our body size, our
weight, and our height. The conclusion is, online shop and offline shop has
their advantages and disadvantages.
Dwi arif wibowo
ReplyDeleteHi nov… this is my comment for your essay
1. " connect with internet," should be changed to " connect to the internet, "
2. " everyting " should be changed to " everything "
3. "Mall or Boutique are waste " should be changed to "Mall or Boutique waste "
4. " we can get the match one." should be changed to " we can get the matching one."
5. "various price " should be changed to "various prices "
6. "somethong else " should be changed to "something else"
7. "It match " should be changed to "It matches"
I’m not perfect. Correct me if I’m wrong
hi bowo. thank you for you comment. :) :)
Deletethere are some mistype in some words. :)
From Aris Nurul
ReplyDeleteEvery gadget = Every gadgets.
your essay is very good,but in sentence you must careful
ReplyDelete1. in second paragraph you write first, the location you should be " first, in the location"
2.in the three paragraph you should change " 2" with" second "
3.the sentence " Same like if we shop in Mall or Boutique " should be" it is same with mall or boutiq "
4.
hi karina. thank you for comment.
Deleteyour comment number 1, i mean that "first, the location" is explain the first reason. If i write "first, in the location" it means i should be add something. i mean, it is like a direction. :)
Hana Suci Anggraeni (1420302175/E)
ReplyDeleteHello novi..you have a good theme for your essay..but, i think there are some mistakes inside your essay, here they are:
1. i think you have to be carefull about where punctuations should be put.
2. on the fourth paragraph, the words "Like in paragraph 2" supposed to be "Like on paragraph 2".then, the words "On online shop" should be "in online shop".
3. on the last paragraph, the word "pay" supposed to be "payment".
that's all Novi. thank's :)
Hi Hana. Thank you for your comment. :) its so usefull :)
DeleteHello Novi! I'd like to correct some mistakes in your essay. Here are my corrections :
ReplyDelete1. "just for clicking them" should be "just by clicking at them"
2. "location, stuff, and pay" should be "location, stuff and pay"
3. You have to pay attention where do you have to cut your sentences. For example like "On online shop, we click the stuff what we want. Looking the stuff that maybe they are not in Mall or Boutique.". It will be better if you write "On online shop, we click the stuff what we want by looking at the stuff that maybe they are not in Mall or Boutique."
That's all, Novi. Thank you ^_^
Andreas indra bagus (1420302178)
ReplyDeletehi novi ..
i just wanna give you some suggestion in this sentence (because every gadget connect with internet) i think should be (because every gadget can connect to the internet)
actualy i found some mistake but your mistake has been corretly by others.
thank you . never give up!!