NAMA : DINA ASFARINA ATRAS
NIM : 1420302163
CLASS : 5
BANK TELLER VS TEACHER
There are a lot of work, and
among this two types of work I want to describe the differences and
similarities owned both. Between bank tellers and teachers are equally provide
services to others. Bank tellers and teachers are two kinds of work. Bank tellers
are an employee of a bank who
deals directly with most customers. While teachers is a people who teach
students to be more clever. Bank tellers have some task to help customers to
save their money, depositing, take money, and how to transfer money. While
teachers have a duty to teach students to read, write, calculate, and teach
their students to be more intelligent.
The bank tellers and teachers
have different of salary. The bank tellers can obtain the sallary 10 million
per month it was only for permanent worker. While the teachers acquire salary 3
until 4 million per month. Become a bank tellers must be friendly,
conscientious, skillful, industrious, disciplined, and persistent. While
teachers should be a skillful interact and understand each the students. The
workplace atmosphere in bank is so comfortable, airy, cozy. While the workplace
atmosphere in school is so bustl, excite, happy, and when exam the atmosphere
to be tense.
The benefit of bank tellers are
can be met with a lot of many characters of people, can interact, and train to
be more patient. While the benefit of teachers are can recognize the
characteristic of many students, can be more patient to face the students. However,
bank tellers have disadvantages like spend a lot of time in air-conditioned
rooms that make skin wringles and reduced time for family. But not any
disadvantages to be teachers. To be teachers can make us more have
meaning.
Bank tellers must have the
calculate skill, how to calculate the much money with short time, they must can
how to complete the matter if the money less. But teachers must be able to try
how to analize the each students. Bank tellers also must be clever to speak with other peole.
The similarities of bank
tellers and teachers are must be honest, friendly, and provide the best
services. Patient not only in bank but in a school must be patient, many
students have different characteristic and it’s the task of teachers to
understand it.
Hana Suci Anggraeni (1420302175/E)
ReplyDeleteHi Dina..your essay's theme looks unique, but i have some ccorrections for your essay, here they are:
1. on the first paragraph, "There are a lot of work" supposed to be "there are a lot of works". after that, you shouldn't give comma after the word "works".
2. the word "while" is prohibited if you put it at the beginning of sentence. after that, don't forget for giving comma beside it.
3. then, on the second paragraph, you should put "and" in this statement "comfortable, airy, cozy" it will become "comfortable, airy, and cozy".
4. at the beginning of third paragraph, "The benefit of bank tellers are " supposed to be "The benefits of bank tellers are', because it is plural. you must pay attention about plural and singular form, OK? ^^
mmm, i think that's all..good writing din
Thank you so much hana for your comment 😚
DeleteShafira Adhelia (1420302179)
ReplyDeleteHi Dina! I found some mistakes in your essay. Here are my corrections for your mistakes :
1. On paragraph 1, "Between bank tellers and teachers " supposed to be "Both bank tellers and teachers "
2. "some task" should be "some tasks"
3. " write, calculate, and teach" should be " write, calculate and teach". You don't have to put coma before "and"
4. On paragraph 2, "have different of salary" should be "have different salary"
5. "The benefit of bank tellers are " should be "The benefits of bank tellers are " because it's plural.
6. You have to pay attention where you have to cut the sentence.
That's all, Dina. Thank you ^^
Hello Dina!!!
ReplyDeleteIn the first paragraph, There are a lot of work you should add “s” after work. There are a lot of works. While teachers is a people who teach students to be more clever. Teachers is without “s” and “while”. Teacher is a people who teach students to be more clever.
In the second paragraph, salary not sallary.
The last paragraph, peole it must be people.
Thank you Dina…
Antika Esty S (1420302161/E)
ReplyDeleteHi Dina, i'd like to comment for your essay
1. "While teachers is a people" should be "are"
2. Become a bank" should be "It becomes a bank".
3. "They must can how" should be "they can.."
Thank you :)
Din, maybe in first paragraf not work, but works..in sentence 'a lot of work' and 'two types of work'
ReplyDelete'But'also should not be written in the back of the point.