The Positive and Negative Effects
of Using Cellphone For Teenagers
The technology development influences
many people to use many kinds of devices like computers, cameras, and
cellphones. These days, the most popular one is cellphones. Back then,
cellphone was just a communication device which was only used by adult people.
At that time, when someone had a cellphone,
it means that he or she was a rich person. Now, it’s all different. The
users of cellphone are increasing. From children, teenagers and old people, all
are using cellphone. They always bring it everywhere and everytime, even the
teenagers bring it to the school.
The
teenagers these days always bring their cellphone to the school and use it to
send messages, take pictures with their friends or open social media. The use
of cellphone by teenagers can give the positive effects and negative affects
for them. They can use cellphone as their important device, can get more
knowledge, but cellphone can also give them bad effects in their studies and
daily life.
Since the teenagers always bring
their cellphone everytime, we can’t deny that cellphone is an important device
for them. They use cellphone as their communication device for calling or sending message to their
friends and their family. When they have the important files from school or
another, they can save it in their cellphone too. Then, they can use their
cellphone as their entertainment device like for taking pictures, playing
music, and even playing games.
The
teenagers can also have more knowledge from using cellphone. They won’t be
stuttering with technology, in this case they will know all about how to use
cellphone. If they can use their cellphones well, they can browse internet to
know some informations and news that they never know. Like when they can’t
fully understand with their lesson in their school, they can browse more
informations about it with their cellphones.
However,
the use of cellphone can also give teenagers bad effect in their studies and
daily life. The use of cellphone in the class can distract their concentration
and make them lost their focus with the lesson. Then, with their cellphones,
they can browse some unproper things for their ages and can plagiarize another
people’s works by copying it without credit. The teenagers can also be addicted
with their cellphones because of playing games or open the social media
continuosly, so they will forget to study. The worst, the use of cellphone by
teenagers when they are walking or ride the transportation, can distract their
focus and cause an accident.
Shortly,
the use of cellphone by teenagers indeed gives positive and negative for them.
Cellphone can be very useful for them if they could use it wisely. They can use
it as communication device, entertainment device and can get more knowledge
from it. When the teenagers start to be addicted with cellphone, it will be
difficult for them to focus on their studies and make they lost their
concentration. The teenagers have to make sure that their cellphones can be
useful in accordance with its functions and use it wisely.
Written by Shafira Adhelia (1420302179/ Class E)
Dwi arif wibowo
ReplyDeleteHi shafira… this is my comment for your essay
1. " everytime, " should be changed to " every time, "
2. " negative affects " should be changed to " negative effects "
3. "informations " should be changed to "information "
4. " unproper " should be changed to " improper "
5. "cellphone was just a communication" should be changed to "cellphone has been just a communication"
6. "addicted with cellphone" should be changed to "addicted to cellphone"
7. "knowledge from using cellphone" should be changed to "knowledge of using cellphone"
8. "They can use it as communication device," should be changed to "They can use it as a communication device,"
I’m not perfect. Correct me if I’m wrong
Thanks for your comment
DeleteHana Suci Anggraeni (1420302175/E)
ReplyDeleteHello Shafira, your essay is almost perfect. but, there are a little misatakes that i find. here they are:
1. On the fourth paragraph, the words "more knowledge" supposed to be " more knowledges".
2. still on the fourth paragraph, the words "They won’t be stuttering" should be "they won't be stuttered".
That's all Ira.
keep up your good writing ^^
thank's
andreas indra (1420302178)
ReplyDeletehi safira
you topic is very good you mention many effect using smartphone in our live.
i like your essay
Thank you for your comments :)
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