Metal Music and Electronic Dance
Music
Music is a phenomenon that very a
unique be produced by some a musical instrument . Music included in a work of
art . Music can also had a role one of the media expression art , music reflect
culture the community his supporters .In in music contained value and norms
that are part of the process enkulturasi culture , either in the form of formal
and informal . In this modern era there are many genres of music. Genres that
will be discussed is EDM music and metal music.
Who had never heard the
name of David Guetta or Calvin Harris ?. They are one of the many dj already
popularized Electronic Dance Music ( EDM ) or dugem music on the stairs music
the main current various radio the world .But do you know if EDM it has many
genre of ?. Electronic dance music or ( EDM ) is a new type of modern music ,
called electronic dance music because this music fully drafted or invented with
tools for instance synthesiezer electronic , squencer , a drum machine maker
and software-software other music as fruitty loop , ebelton , virtual dj etc
.Besides that , Music metal or heavy metal is one of the genre of music famous
and popular in this modern era .Music metal have specific characteristic which
the song themes violence and death .In addition music metal identical with men
and also attaching with mellow underground .Music metal is characterized by
distortion guitar strong , solo guitar long , beat of a drum rapid in all
instrumentation the music .Music rock or music metal also known with a singer
and metal band dominant black with accessories gothic and horror .
It is the difference that
very clearly from both of the genre of the music, , and i think the similarity
of a genre of the music found in very popular or many fans genre of the music
in this world.
The
conclusion that EDM music and metal is genre of music which have the
differences in terms of appearance and the style of music .And both were
popular in nowadays.
"enkulturasi"? That is a Indonesian word. You should write " enculturation"
ReplyDeleteIn line 4, i guess it will be beter if "music reflect the culture of the community that support it.
ReplyDeleteStill in line 4, please check. You write word "in" twice.
In line 21, please check. You write 2 comma.
Thank you 😀
"...era( .M)usic..., ...the music(, , )and..., ...loop , ebelton , virtual dj etc( .B)esides...." there are many rulles that you has destroyed. Please be carefull with your writing, :)
ReplyDeleteI'm sorry..I mean "you have" not "you has"..
ReplyDeletethank you
Hi nova. I'd like to comment your essay.
ReplyDelete1. Paragraph 1: "some a musixal instrument" should be "some of the musical instruments"
2. Paragraph 2: "But..." i think, but isnt allowed on the beginning of the sentence. "And software-software other" do you mean "and other music softwares" ? "The genre of famous and popular" should be "the famous and popular music genre". "Which the song themes violence and death" should be "which the themes song are violence and death". "And also attaching" should be "attach" because, there is an "and".
3. Paragraph 3: "It is the difference" should be "there are differences"
4. Paragraph 4: "music and metal is" should be "music and metal are"
You have to check the punctuation.
CMIIW.
Sorry nova, in the sentence "But do you know if EDM it has many genre of?" But..in the beginning of the sentence is did not allowed..
ReplyDeleteOne more, the layout of the connections sentence also messy, should “eg. Aku arep nang Matahari, tapi koe ojo melu. Antengo nang ngomah” that questioned is a point and in a coma.
ReplyDeletemy comment for your essay
ReplyDeletethere are some mistake in your punctuation like this paragraph "In this modern era there are many genres of music." must be "In this modern era, there are many genres of music.", "Music can also had a role one of the media expression art , music reflect culture the community his supporters ." must be "Music can also had a role one of the media expression art, music reflect culture the community his supporters." so please be carefully
CMIIW :v
there are some mistakes :v
DeleteHana Suci Anggraeni (1420302175/E)
ReplyDeleteHelooo Nova! your title looks cool, but there are some comments that i will give to you. here they are:
1. on the first paragraph, this statement "that very a unique be produced by some a musical instrument" should be replaced into "that is very unique which is produced by a musical instrument".
2. on the second paragraph, you'd better to give comma after word "but".
3. i think you should maintain your grammar nov.
4. then, you've to pay attention about singular form, plural form and also the punctuation.
well, that's all nov
Antika Esty S (1420302161/E)
ReplyDeleteHi Nova, i want to give some comments for your essay
1. Sentence "by some a musical" i think it doesn't use word "a".
2. Sentence "music metal have specific" it is wrong, should be "has".
3. "EDM Music and metal is.." is wrong, it should be "are".
4. "And both.." in writing rule, conjunction doesn't use in beginning sentence.
Thank you :)