Name : Yulinda Pratiwi
SN : 1420302176
Class : 5/E
CAUSE-EFFECT
ESSAY
Topic : Medical (What
effects does stress have on health? )
As
a social human which lived in crowded world, surely sometimes we found a
problem whether it is the problem with our family or friends. Whether it is
about financial or social problems. Certainly, it causing us to think about it.
Stress can be happened to everyone. For people who doesn’t care too much about
the problem, it don’t give significant risk but at least they also feel the
effect of their problem which causing stress and disturbing their healthiness,
whether physical or mental healthiness. Moreover, for people who tink it too
much, and have a genetic possibilities to get some cronies disease it can
increased the risk.
When
they think too much and causing stress, at the same time our brain also
processed the information which has been received and try to find the way to
solve it. If we think with calm thinking, then we will find the way to solve
it. But, the question is “can we always have positive thinking to get the solution?”.
If we can’t do it, surely our brain will hard work to ge the solution. Part of
our brain called hipotalamus which
influenced releasing adrenaline hormone also have a part in this process. When
we think too much, and can’t find the solution, it pushed our brain to think
hard and it can increased the production of adrenaline hormone, and it
influenced our heart beating, high blood pressure and some system in our body
such as slowing down blood system, immune system, heart activity.
Stress
causing some cronies diseases such as cancer and it also disturbing the immune
system. Automatically, when we stress it decrease the condition of our physical
for example : dizzy, weak, headache, etc. Body net is an important actor
in defense body system, included blood
net and limfatic net. Blood net which
important actor in defense body system is leukosit.
When we are stress, our brain inform others system and leisurely the work of
our immune system. If the immune systems work leisurely it will easier for
microbe to go into our body and blocked the immune cell and directly we will
got ill.
If
there is strange protein (antigen) go
into our body, sel B which had
specialized will product a protein called antibodi.
Antibodi which involved in allergic
reaction is from IgE (imunoglobulin E)
when there is a substance which cause allergic , so IgE will stimulate makrofag to
release histamin and caused other inflamed
(Marieb & Mallatt 2001, Marieb 2004).
Cancer
is included to Heteroantigen because
it caused from antigen in other
species and characterized carsinogent.
The process is from transformation
that included initiation and promotion. In
general, from one process normal substance being a malignant substance until
the DNA system in the substance will changing. Alteration of cell genetic
substance sometimes hard to find but it can detected from a changes the shapes
and the measurement. One of the important things except stress is history of
family. Someone who had genetic possibilities moreover added stress will easier
to get the risk of cancer. But,
apparently the risk of cancer can be preventable by doing some relaxation
technique to decrease the stress. The purpose is to calm down our brain and
give calming effect to our body. The relaxation technique can do at home or at
gymnastium, such as gymnastic and yoga.
Stress also causing heart disease, because when we are stress it influenced adrenaline hormone, the heart beats and high blood pressure. At heart , stress raises sympathetic nervous stimulation . Irregular heart rhythms to cause vascular events ( coronary heart disease ) . Stress also cause hypertension ( high blood pressure ) which may lead to heart failure and kidney failure . It preventable by checking the heart health regulary.
Stress increasing desire everyone to eaat too much, moreover the food which contains high calories. It causing body weight problems, because when we eat food which contains high calories, the calories would be burried in some part of our body, and it will distrub blood circulation. Overweight can increase the risk of diabetes disease, but it preventable by maintain the meals system.
When we are stress it give directly effect to our mental. It causing depression and worrying, because when stress we will think too much about the problem. It preventable by doing sport activity regulary.
The
other effect of stress is causing our hair to fall of. Our hair will releasing alopecia areata (white blood cell which
‘attack’ hair follicle) ; telogen
effluvium ( hair stopped to grow) ;
trikotilomania (causing hair to fall
of because depression,
worrying, sadness, etc). It preventable by
always try to positive thinking.
Stress
also causing metabolic syndrome. Metabolic syndrome is combination of diabetes,
high blood presure, overweight, abnormal cholesterol degree. If it happened at
the same time, it can increase the risk of heart disease. It preventable by
doing 4 strategy : (a) do something that can relax your brain/ thinking ; (b)
do an exercise regulary ; (c) meet with your friends, or family so you can
communicate and share the story each other ; (d) Eat the food which contains
high acid fat-omega3 such as fishes, or beans.
We
can found many effect of stress for our brain and body health. Mostly, there
are some factors that can increasing the risk of cronies disease such as
diabetes, and heart disease. Although there are many risk/ effect, we can
decrease it with some activity which can help us to keep our helathiness.
Hi yulinda, your essay looks great, but i think it would be greater if you give it a title :) well, i have some comments for your essay. here they are:
ReplyDelete1. on the first paragraph, "it causing us" supposed to be "it causes us".then, you'd better to replace "For people who doesn’t " into "For people who don’t".
2. on the second paragraph, the word "processed" supposed to be "process".
3. on the third paragraph. "Stress causing" should be "Stress causes".
4. on the seventh paragraph, you made a mistyping, that is "eaat" :D it's supposed to be "eat".
5. you should pay attention about the plural and singular form and where you should use simple continous or simple present tenses.
That's all yul, i think your essay is good enough..
Hello Yulinda!!!
ReplyDeleteI’m sorry but any words that you must change because that’s wrong words, such as :
In the first paragraph, Whether it is about financial or social problems. Certainly, it must be Whether it is about financial or social problems, certainly,
Tink it must be think.
In the second paragraph, ge it must be get.
And the third paragraph, called antibodi. Antibodi which it must antibody. Hestamin must be hestamine
Thank you Yulinda…
Shafira Adhelia (1420302179)
ReplyDeleteHi Yulinda! I found some mistakes in your essay. Here are my corrections for your mistakes :
1. I think the whole of this essay refers to present, so the sentence "As a social human which lived in crowded world, surely sometimes we found a problem whether it is the problem with our family or friends" should be "As a social human which live in crowded world, surely sometimes we find a problem whether it is the problem with our family or friends"
2. On paragraph 1, "For people who doesn’t care" should be "For people who do not care"
3. "it don’t give" should be "it doesn’t give"
4. " which causing stress" should be " which is causing stress"
5. On paragraph 2, "calm thinking" will be better if you replace it with "calm thought"
6. "When we think too much," should be "When we think too much" without coma after word "much"
7. On paragraph 3, " it also disturbing" should be " it also disturbs"
8. On paragraph 5, "it caused" should be "it is caused"
9. On paragraph 6, "Stress also cause" should be "Stress also causes"
10. "When we are stress it give directly effect to our mental" should be "When we are stressed, it directly gives effect to our mental"
That's all. Thank you ^^
Antika Esty S (1420302161/E)
ReplyDeleteHi Yulinda, i'd like to comment for your essay
1. "It causing us" should be "it is causing"
2. "It don't give" should be "it doesn't give"
3. "It can increased" should be "can be"
4. "Stress causing some"sould be "is caused"
Thank you :)
1. 'Calm thinking' maybe 'calm thought'
ReplyDelete2. 'Body net' maybe 'The body net'